Idle
like now - i'm leaving apples in fat people's throats
- oh, but i'm so close to roasting you compost heaps -
there's only no space left in this seat!
but they sit and expand and leak onto my side...
teeth lodged in an elbow? or my elbow with teeth inside?
i'm without a stimulated reply
but i've heard shrieks in return from new holes in cheeks
but me? i'm back to *observing* (ob - prefix meaning inversely; serving - being used by)
i'm back to the byline - just over the body
not entitled to non-fiction - then i lip-sync'd, "i'm sorry..."
- oh, but i'm so close to roasting you compost heaps -
there's only no space left in this seat!
but they sit and expand and leak onto my side...
teeth lodged in an elbow? or my elbow with teeth inside?
i'm without a stimulated reply
but i've heard shrieks in return from new holes in cheeks
but me? i'm back to *observing* (ob - prefix meaning inversely; serving - being used by)
i'm back to the byline - just over the body
not entitled to non-fiction - then i lip-sync'd, "i'm sorry..."
posted by Unknown at 12:00 PM
2 Comments:
i'm actually uncertain about this post as i didnt put as much time into it as i would have liked... but i'm happy with it overall though i will update it at some point to fill in [what i feel are] information gaps...
below is a duplication of the comments i left for everyone who commented on the last post.
it's unfortunate to see less comments for this piece [Purpose] than the last [Birth] - i was hoping for an increase... also, i've been responding to people's comments - for now on i'll include my responses in the updated piece's section. thanks for all the comments, and to:
ej, i'm glad you like the a,b,c tie in - i was hoping it would be effective and noticed.
blessced, you get props on publishing the best comment this go around - sometimes i have ideas that i publish and know about without being able to explain to others, but you just did the job for me and it was beautiful!=)
dj, primal is right on the spot - i'm trying to go for the most instinctual hatred and out lashes i can go for... it's only fair considering that harsh world we're bearing with, right?
g, i wanted more from you man - how are you going to persuade me to spit at the Village Underground if i can't get more insight from my self-proclaimed promoter? LOL, hit me again!=)
Oh, and where's Mish?!=(
Oh, how I can relate to some of these things. But is it appropriate to say that? Honest, maybe...
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